Submissive Script

[MasterSouthernStar]

02/16/2014 at 10:29 pm

Hi All;

I’ve posted another script that I will be using first in my training journal, but I actually wrote this one first and I feel pretty good about it. I don’t have a lot of experience writing these things, but I have read most all of yours’ here in the forum. I thought I would solicit comment and suggestion from those with more experience. Please let me know what you think.

I am relaxed around Master.
I am safe submitting to Master.
Obeying Master frees me of my burden.
Master is my reward.
Being with Master makes me happy.
Being with Master is security.
Master is always there for me.
I am always happy with Master.
Pleasing Master makes me happy.
Pleasing Master is security.
Being Obedient to Master makes me happy.
Obeying Master makes me feel good about myself.
I love the way I feel when I please Master.

Some of this was borrowed from other’s scripts here and modified, and some of it wasn’t. I am interested to get feedback though. A bit of background though – she is cool with slave and Master as we use those everyday as forms of address in the house. So at least there’s no worries that way. Thank you for taking the time.

MSS

[eldrin81]

02/17/2014 at 12:05 am

I assume Master is a token for your real name, and not the actual word master? Otherwise looks good.
If not add a statement or two about how You are her master, just to reinforce the association.

[MasterSouthernStar]

02/17/2014 at 12:15 am

Eldrin;

Actually Master is what she calls me here in house. She tells me its always difficult for her when we’re out and about to remember NOT to call me Master. If fact she has slipped a few times too. So I feel good with “Master” in this application. But thanks for the input
MSS

[eldrin81]

02/17/2014 at 1:43 am

In that case it’s the same as using a nickname, except it has added meaning.

[seekenq]

02/17/2014 at 2:23 am

MSS

First I would ask is what is your goal for the script ?
Do you have a specific behavior you want to introduce or change ?

Not knowing the goal I would say It looks pretty solid to me as a general “feel good” script.
Reinforces safety, security and obedience to you as master.
Good references to happiness and feeling rewarded through obedience.
I might add a couple lines about trusting master, e.g.
Master always knows what is best for me.
I trust master to guide me in all things.
My trust in master is rock solid.

Some comments on my writing style – not saying it is better or worse than any other way, just how I do it.
I try to start each lines with I when possible – I am happy obeying master, I feel safe, I want, I love etc.
I tend to group lines with the same concepts together into groups of 3 or 4.
I use a 1.5 second pause between each item in the group and then a longer 2 second pause after the last line in the group.
I try to make the last line in the group the most important one – the idea I want to stick most.

I identify my core idea group and will repeat that group a couple of times in a given script for more repetitions.

Lastly, I would echo the suggestions of others here (forgot who – sorry) – write, sleep on it, review it, repeat.
I normally work on a script for about a week before taking it live.

Do you have a specific behavior you want to introduce or change ?

[Tap]

02/17/2014 at 3:51 am

I think it’s good that you already have her identifying you as master. In this way, she can associate master with you already so she knows the script is for how she acts towards you. It’s simple, short, and to the point. I do agree with what seekenq is saying about grouping similar ideas as I do that in my scripts. This is so the subconscious doesn’t have to jump around with following the ideas. Consider this order:

I am relaxed around Master.
Master is always there for me.
Master is my reward.
I am safe submitting to Master.
Being with Master is security.
Pleasing Master is security.
Obeying Master frees me of my burden.
Being Obedient to Master makes me happy.
Obeying Master makes me feel good about myself.
Pleasing Master makes me happy.
I love the way I feel when I please Master.
Being with Master makes me happy.
I am always happy with Master.

If you follow it, it’s general ideas about master, then the security affirmations, followed by the obeying affirmations, then the pleasing you affirmations, concluded by her being happy.

[eldrin81]

02/17/2014 at 4:07 pm

I will echo what tap has said here. Even when you have tightly interwoven affirmations, there are sometimes ‘sub topics’ that should be grouped together. Just off the top of my head here is another example:(Note I just came up with this)

House wife:
(General header, identifying what she is, what the script is about.)
I am a house wife.
I enjoy being a house wife.
(Cleaning sub topic. Its part of being a house wife, but its a slightly different topic than above.)
I enjoy cleaning the house.
Cleaning Relaxes me.
I always keep the kitchen and bathroom sparkling clean.
I always keep the floors swept and mopped.
(Cooking sub topic)
I enjoy cooking.
I am confident in my cooking skills.
Cooking for my husband every day fulfills me.

You don’t always have to start a sentence with I, but that is a decent and common way to stay in first person. Staying in first person is paramount unless you are trying something more advanced. But start at the basics of course. First person (I, me, my, mine etc)

Approach your script like writing an article. Come up with the theme/focus/topic first. Break that thing down into sub topics. It helps me to type out simple headers with a line in between. These aren’t affirmations, but to remind me of the ‘sections’ of my script. Kind of like paragraphs in an article. Most people generally start off with an opening statement or two that really summarizes the whole piece, this is like any other human writing endeavor.

Example: Lets say you want to write a script like above about being a good house wife. What topics are involved in such a thing. Cooking, cleaning, laundry for starters.

[eldrin81]

02/17/2014 at 4:12 pm

As Tap noted, keeping your sub topics grouped, is the same reason we keep scripts in a playlist at 10+ min. Its not as effective if your script is bouncing all over the place. Sometimes I just write a rough draft to get my thoughts on paper, then go back through and group stuff together, and look for redundancy. Redundancy is good when you are explaining a topic like submission to someone like my wife, and using different words to help her understand what you mean:

I am a submissive wife.
I enjoy giving up control to Eldrin.
I always obey Eldrin.

Redundancy is probably inneffective in the following:

I am a happy house wife.
Being a house wife makes me happy.

These two statements say basically the same thing, with NO added meaning. This is not as good since it adds time and decreases repetitions without adding meaning or understanding of the topic.

[MasterSouthernStar]

02/17/2014 at 7:55 pm

Wow Fellows! Great Responses.

Tap – thanks for the re order. I had been thinking of going back and regrouping them but hadn’t really gotten to it and it kind of got lost when time came to post. So thank you – I really like the grouping. Very elegant.

Seekenq – I do not have a specific behavior in mind for modification at this point. This was intended as something merely to cement in her subconscious the slave identity and try to get her happy about it. Happy is what I’m looking for – for her. She tends to see the negative – like so many people – and it tends to kill joy. So this was intended to get her happy with what she’s already reasonably happy with. Cement that and build from there was the thought.

Regarding the focus on “I”; that’s kind of a toughie in the Ds realm. The slave identity is classically without “self” and using the term “I” is to be minimized. Certainly it’s grammatically necessary at times but the concept of reinforcing the “I” is inconsistent with the lifestyle. Of course as you can see from my initial script it’s not absolutely unusable, but it’s not something I think would work well with her mindset. Thinking too much of herself makes her uncomfortable – and so repetitively using the “I” in the primary position might just give her an uneasy feeling about the recording. Honest she does not do “I” well. So thank you for the suggestion and I have no doubt it is terribly effective for “vanilla” females, but in this case I will continue to try to minimize the use of “I”.

Eldrin – thanks a bunch for this and all the other help you’ve been providing me of late. Your tips on writing are excellent and I will use them going forward for sure.

As always this forum has shown itself to be very helpful and I appreciate all who have contributed.

MSS

[seekenq]

02/18/2014 at 1:24 am

MSS

Yes, of course you are right – sorry.
My vanilla roots are showing.
I have to admit I have always wanted a Ds relationship but never thought it was possible with my wife – until recently.
Now it is part of a long term goal for my scripts.
I may lean on you for some advice as I try to move in that direction.

I took another look at the script as modified by Tap.
I then took a shot at adjusting pronouns to better fit your relationship.
Lastly I added a grouping about building trust and another / alternate obedience group adapted from one of my scripts.
If happiness is the main goal then I would try to double down on that message.

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Slave is relaxed around Master.
Master is always there for slave.
Master is this slave’s reward.

Obeying Master frees slave of her burden.
Being Obedient to Master makes slave happy.
Obeying Master makes Slave feel good about herself.

Slave is safe submitting to Master.
Being with Master is security.
Pleasing Master is security.

Master always knows what is best for slave.
Slave trusts master to guide her in all things.
Slaves trust in master is rock solid.

Obedience is happiness
Through obedience Slave is fulfilled.
Perfect obedience to Master is slaves goal in life.

Pleasing Master makes slave happy.
Slave loves the way she feels when she pleases Master.
Being with Master makes Slave happy.
Slave is always happy with Master.

[Tap]

02/18/2014 at 1:54 am

MSS,

That’s an interesting idea about the use of I and her as a slave. I suppose it makes sense to minimize it’s use. It would be something if I could get my wife into that type of slave thinking.

[MasterSouthernStar]

02/18/2014 at 7:16 pm

Seekenq;

Great adjustment – Thanks. The problem with the slave thing is the same as everyone has with their wives – how far along is she and what is she comfortable with? I love your adjustment. I will use some of it. I want to leave SOME of the affirmations with the “me” in there just to be sure she realizes. Or maybe I’ll ad one Linking her to the identity “slave” and repeat it before each cluster. Hmmm things to think about. As we know, if one goes too far afield of the comfort zone the subliminal suggestion can fail to be absorbed. She IS my slave – but she’s far from the perfect slave yet. Hence all these recordings. I have concern that the true slave identity may not be complete to the subliminal level. I think the total evacuation of the self – now that I see it in print – MAY be too big a commitment to make in a recording I want to be sure works. Then again if I add in an affirmation that she IS slave – it might be double edged in that it would reinforce the slave identity AND provide security and attitude reinforcement. I’ve got to think about this for a bit.

This forum is just the best. Thanks to all the guys for the help.

MSS

[seekenq]

02/18/2014 at 10:48 pm

MSS:

I don’t think you can go wrong following the DreamGirls Mantra – when in doubt, take it slow.
Taking a month (or two) to reinforce the slave identity and helping her to be happier about it sounds pretty good.
I understand the issues with personal references but, as you said everyone is at a different place on their journey.

I do like your idea of a inserting a cluster linking her identity as a happy slave and repeating it.
IMHO, Before every other cluster might be a bit much but perhaps 3 or 4 times in the script would be good.
First cluster, in the middle, and near the end (remember the beginning is right after the end in a looping script).
Adapting some of my “happiness clusters” (I used wife and husband) from my scripts…

I love being a good slave for my master.
I always try to be a better slave for my master.
Becoming a perfect slave brings me Joy.

I am a good slave for Master.
Being a good slave feels wonderful.
I always enjoy being a good slave.

I have a strong desire to be a good slave for master
My pleasure comes from being a good slave for master.
My need to be a good slave increases every day.

[trainer81]

02/21/2014 at 1:29 am

My wife and I call each other “Wife” and “Husband” as pet names. We’ve done this for most of our marriage (15 years).

For most of our marriage it’s been off and on, but recently, I’ve made it a point to stress to her that I want her to call me Husband exclusively. Of course this is because I’ve customized my scripts to use “wife” and “husband.”

So if there’s a behavior I want her to adopt, I write:

A wife does X for her husband
I do X for my husband
You do X for your husband

Essentially, each line is written three times, in first, second, and third person for reinforcement.

I think you could try the same wording, but use slave for wife and master for husband. That’s actually my long term goal – to make wife synonymous with slave and husband synonymous with master. I think I’m setting myself up for a nice transition down the road. We shall see…

Funny, she sent me an email from work a couple weeks ago, and instead of finishing with “Love, Wife” as she had been doing, she wrote “Yours, [Name]” and I teased her about that. I wasn’t mad, but I wanted to point it out to her – her response was something like “Husband, Husband, Husband, I am so sorry…” She said she had just written a bunch of work emails with the above closing and forgot to change it when she emailed me, and then signed it “Your loving wife.” She hasn’t made the same mistake since.

[gtbear]

03/02/2014 at 1:37 am

MSS,

In some past training of some very sub girls, I found it useful to have them always refer to themselves as ‘this girl’. It replaces I or i or me or myself etc. in the inner talk quickly and helps to cement the slave / submissives a: self image as an it / property (subtlely and gently), b: is a respectful manner in which to speak when that is necessary, c: almost instantly produces submissive thought processes. Used in all situations and without fail ‘this girl’ makes the slave equate her status to all and many other slaves (one of many / part of the herd / only special by virtue of her masters will). I have never had much resistance from sub girls concerning this form of speach, d: It is easy to substitute a slave name for some formal or public functions but she will eventually always think of herself as ‘this girl’ and answer to whatever you name her. It’s a Gorean thing but has served me well.

If you institute ‘this girl’ as a rule in her daily interactions with you, it should not take more than a week to have settled in enough to expect it to be just fine in her sublims. I hope that you find that helpful.

[MasterSouthernStar]

03/03/2014 at 7:18 pm

GT;

I had completely forgotten that. Thank you for the reminder. And yes I believe it will be a good thing for her training. I will begin instituting that process today. Thanks again.

MSS